Thank you very much for your comments seaJane. None of them are unreasonable
but there are some suprises there. However, on thinking about them they make perfect sense now.
First, in my defence please take a look at the time and date of my posting.
I struggled to feel inspired this month and struggled to put together what you see. It's now obvious to me that it could have been worth more had I had some belief in it.
I'm slightly baffled by Mark's sudden lack of interest at the end of this one
I had in mind that however much we may wish we had asked veterans of the war to tell us about their experiences before it was too late to do so not all of them would have been able to engage their listener's attention or even had anything interesting to tell. I obviously completely missed putting across that Mr Murray was one of these!
after a trip into No Man's Land to see what we could see -
where's the exciting description of a terrifying expedition out into No Man's Land in the cold and dark which a young lad would have relished?
Mark wasn't bothered by the voice out of the darkness because the significance of it was totally lost to him because he wasn't into poetry at all and especially that particular one. Sorry Thomas Hardy, but honestly, how uninspiring is
Looking forward to the Spring
One puts up with anything.
He struggled to pay attention and then tried to pull the conversation back to something exciting with "Mr Murray, do you wish you had shot him?"
So, all in all what shall we say? I feel it's a pretty disappointing piece really but I should have made a better job of it.
Now, onwards and upwards to the March title.....